I read through that and honestly don't feel like I know a thing about this guy. He's a smoke mage and rune user, he likes to smoke and he's real laid back. That about all the information contained there.

Tell me something about this guy that I wouldn't know from seeing him walk down the street. What are his likes, dislikes, what does he do for fun, what is his home life like, does he have any siblings, what are his parents like, where was he born since even that isn't there, what do you mean by life being turned upside down, how was he recruited by D.I.S. I want to be able to identify with this guy, know a few things about him cause at the moment for all the words in your app there isn't a whole lot there.

Oh and I updated the app, it's on the OOC.