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New Idea: Okay, small town, population 400 at the most, maybe like a tiny coastal community, probably pretty poor area, actually, maybe the population is closer to a thousand. Okay, anyway, it's a fishing community that starts hearing weird things in the night, weird noises coming from the sea. maybe it turns out to be some ancient sea-god come to reclaim the coast. Maybe its aliens. Maybe its nothing.

Fuck, what is it?
19 Mar 2017 2:35
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Okay, confession time. When I made the character for BlackSam3091's Mass Effect: Underworld, I used the bio from a villain I had for a different Sci-Fi universe. In fact, the Ellis Taevon they're familiar with is nothing like the Ellis Taevon I originally made. He's better humored, and less unpredictable. He's also not nearly as smart.

Plus, in my original works, NERO was a extradimensional parasite that had latched itself to Ellis' mind, convincing him it was the voice of God, using the man's opportunities to achieve dimensional domination.

NERO wasn't even its real name. It was the designation of a simple AI that Ellis had installed in his exo-suit, that NERO devoured, and mimicked.

The true Ellis, in fact, is nigh invincible, an indestructible villain for a hero whose luck is practically is a skill in itself, an enemy that could only be destroyed by his own hand. I'm gonna let the ME:Underworld Ellis Taevon continue to grow on his own, as he'll likely end up being the other Ellis' role model, in my head.

Plus, let's hope Jeb can find him first.
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Taking Timothy

Short Story, Suspense?


This one reminded me a bit of Death Note. Although the supernatural being in that was a death god and the boy was an ace-student with a detective father. But, maybe the idea of a human+supernatural pair may work as a jumping off point? Maybe introduce another demon who also has a host boy. As a suspense, the new pair could be cunning and the narrator and his "ward" would need to get better despite the fact that the boy's parents are calling on 'the Lord'.

And I also got the vibe that you could work it as a dark comedy, especially with your narrator. Where two demons had two different but similarly twink-ish boys. The demons may need to prove their worth to a higher power to stay as demons or perhaps they just are long time rivals who need to one up each other. So, they try to 'fix their twinks'.

The beginning obviously has some darkness to it, and it may be sacrilegious to give it humor, but the demons also have very little morality...so...

Well, now I'm rambling.

ps. Thanks for the ideas on my post. I posted the short story as a potential RP. Your notes on the female narrator were enlightening. I've never looked at her in that particlar light. Really she was kind of personality-less to me, which maybe why I stopped. But, now I've got some where to go. Thanks. :)

19 Mar 2017 9:39
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@Hanleth I was actually thinking it might be interesting to introduce the Christian therapist as a sort of demonic "mystery shopper", who reviews possessions for Satan's pyramid scheme. So, he would be really annoying, and pushing Timmy's buttons, until Timmy's demon manifested, and the Psychiatrist would record just how well the demon had possessed him, for quality assurance purposes.

I like the idea of introducing another demon. I'm sure you can tell, but the demon didn't really develop a character until partaway through, so the rewrite will encompass that. But yeah, another demon, especially an ultra-professional demon, like, all evil, all the time, would be extremely fun. Like, literally, to the extremes of fun. And yeah, it's sacrilegious for fun. I figured if angels are always praising God, demons would always be damning him and expressing fear of Satan.
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I don't know about everyone else, but I tend to beat the snot out of my protagonists right off the bat.
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