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Is this still open?
Is this still open?
I was wondering if this would be open for me to join as Ireland, occupying the southern regions, as I see that there already a nation in Ulster?
Here's the third city. I only have two more cities that I want to do, but they are basically the same so I am including them in the same sheet. This is Kareka.

The second city of the Aelkan City States: Erakan.


So I was wondering, since there is a number of veteran warriors, is anyone willing to be Erryn's mentor of sorts. He's untrained and ignorant of the ways of war, so I was wondering if any of these well-experienced fighters wanted to him under their wing and teach him how to fight. If not, that's cool. I just wanted to try and make an opening for a bond between characters.
A couple notes on Ekrech @ulsterwarrior:

  • First, try to separate the blocky text into smaller paragraphs at natural breakpoints. The city-state's page is difficult to read right now. If you want, I can handle those sort of edits.
  • Secondly, keep in mind that humanity is a flawed species, and no city will be perfect. While it can definitely be a great place to live, this should come at some sort of price. Perhaps the other Aelkan city states suffer as their resources are pulled into Ekrech, or perhaps the city's army is not as strong as the stories claim. (I won't suggest the "corruption" route because Amurach has that covered.) Perhaps you might consider a pro-Human angle for the city's flaw? Non-humans might be looked down upon, seen as despoilers of the fair city? Just a thought, but again: you need some sort of flaw.
  • Also, while it may prefer to make friends rather than enemies, there's definitely going to be a lot of covetous eyes looking toward that city. I think you understand that very well, and I like your allusions to that. I'd suggest keeping that in mind when writing up the other city states. Perhaps one of them has suffered most at the hands of raiders and has become considerably more warlike than its neighbors... and has a grudge against those cities near it that haven't had to suffer as it has suffered.
  • Your plot hooks are all very good. I'm happy there.


EDIT: I see, on a closer inspection, that you did mention the army being possibly weak and soft. Makes perfect sense. Good!


First point, I'll fix that. It just gets complicated because I write it up in a Word Document. Second point, I was eventually going to address that with the other cities. The people of Ekrech aren't bad people, and they're even nice. They don't try and hurt people. What they don't realize is that they have been unintentionally hurting the other cities due to the tributes they demand. Most of the cities are cool with it, because that's just life for them, but I'm going to have one of the cities be a bit of an odd duckling and try and start causing trouble. I also like the idea of disliking of non-humans. I'll wait and see what races pop up from other players, but I'll probably add that. Third, yeah, as there isn't much else there yet, I put Ekrech's main enemies as the desert lords and the Orcs that you alluded to in Amurach. I'm not sure how far away Amurach is from Ekrech, but if you want, the two could have a rivalry. Or if someone else makes a bloodthirsty settlement/nation to the south that wants to invade, I'm down for that.
Here is the first city of the Aelkan City States. There will be three to four more but I wanted to put this one down now. Feel free to make any edits necessary.

I was wondering if it was alright if I created a collection of city states in the south east, around the rivers in the desert? They would be separate cities but allied due to the Orc presence in the area.
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