Oh. Oh, my. Change nothing! Not one word, phrase, or comma! That was a beautiful transition! I love how you set her imagination on fire to the point of distraction! It adds a realism to Bess. It makes her solid and human!

Her paramour is planning to take her on a bit of a lark. With luck, I should have a reply up for you later tonight. Half the ideas are already spilling out of my head, and if I don't respond I doubt I'll sleep too well tonight!