So, I just got my ice cream, and ready to do this.
I'd like to give thanks to Savi for mentioning these small things, but I shall carry this off with...

[quote=Wisp]
>> There are so many ellipses, it's hard to focus. And run-on sentences. And parentheses. 
>> Raphael's King called, not Gabriel's King - two totally different people
>> Kingdom of Gabriel killed her parents - they have the assassins and are the threat to the Kingdom of Michael.
>> Kingdom of Raphael wishes for peace, and has not harmed anyone.
>> Kingdom of Lucifer is naught but a bedtime story to frighten children into behaving - definitely not common knowledge or well-known.
>> There is no option, no choice, in the eldest rising to the throne. Adeline was never an option, since she has an elder sister.
>> To wish for death and leave with the intent is essentially treason - if she does not die from her little "mission", she will likely be hung.
>> Ash is not in the Kingdom of Michael, much less your character. Ash is Princess Ani's personal servant in the Kingdom of Gabriel.[/quote]

So me and Wisp observed pretty much the same things, and these are pretty much it -- though I didn't recognize the sixth bullet's info until now. Even though Savi already mentioned such, I would still like to point out the second bullet along with bullets one, three, four, five, and the last one. Those are just my main burdens and the rest of the stuff is something I can suck up after an experience in... Free Role-play.

Yes, there are many ellipses, which makes it odd to read. I understand there are only two parentheses, and if that is part of your writing style then I cannot really deny you from such. There are also some run-on sentences, but maybe it's just the ellipses driving me crazy. Suppose this is just your writing style and maybe I am not one to judge. I too have a rather annoying writing style, or so I would assume... I seek no flattery however, and I will carry on with my points.
Yet, I am much caring for the information being presented in the role-play. You will have to revise and acknowledge that Raphael was calling for this meeting. A messenger would have come for her anyways, but I suppose whichever way or thing works for you is fine... I also cannot really tell where your character is, which completely threw me off when she was found behind Ash since he was in Ani's room and I was like -- what? I would assume naturally by knowing your character that she was in the Kingdom of Michael, but maybe, for some reason, I am wrong. While that, I suppose your character believing in myths and superstitions could be some form of justice towards thinking the Kingdom of Lucifer is real, but for the majority of the people the kingdom has been put to rest so long ago that there is no chance it's coming back ( or perhaps some other reason as to why they wouldn't believe it's active or existing, either or ). Another point I should make is that during the text...
[quote=Kaalee]Although...that hadn't worked out too well in the recent past...since she was having to make this [b]decision[/b] in the first place although she knew her sister wouldn't have been a good Queen...[/quote]
The word [b]decision[/b] changes much about what is going on. I would understand if she felt cornered, like she couldn't trust her sister with having the throne, however the seat goes to the eldest in the royal family line. Maybe this is just your diction, but it does change the meaning of the sentence or how she was given a choice. If you cannot comply with the above, then you are free to leave. However, I trust that if you intend to stay you will change your post to the correct order or you will have to be removed. Forgive me for this post early in time -- it was necessary.