Hmm... I dunno. There are some errors, and for some reason, you still refer to Tyrone as 'Drowzee' in the appearance section. I'm guessing that was what you were going to call him until you saw that I didn't want you to use the species name as the character's name. That, and, what's up with the random Ghastly that somehow knows that Tyrone would lose, and somehow cares enough to show him to some town? For some odd reason, I also feel as if you'd pull whatever team Tyrone ends up on into your his personal vendetta, and may try to make him the main character on that team, which isn't a good thing unless it's pulled off by a good Rper. Something about the whole 'My character has to beat this evil guy' reeks of Mary/Marty Sue/Stu to me.
Now, I'm not calling you a bad RPer, however, let's admit, you're used to Rps which are a skill level down from this.