[quote=Reaper]
A few things:1. Being able to magically manipulate any electronic is a little... open to abuse. Could you remove that or limit it to simple, rudimentary electronic systems?2. I'm okay with the elemental powers, but either limit his mastery over all of them or decrease the number of elements he can successfully control. I'm okay with his powers coming into full bloom eventually, just not right from the start of the RP. Also, it's up to you, but I suggest making it so his powers are capable of friendly fire.3. Arthus is fine overall, but tone down on the strength a little, if you would? Arthur seems more like Hercules with that level of strength. I'd say lifting trees is fine, but throwing them would be highly improbable, if it was say, fifty meters, I'd say it's still fine. I'm judging this based on Merlin's diary account, so if you could be more specific that'd be great.4. This is more of a suggestion, but including appearance and personalities would be a lot more help to people reading the CS so we don't have to guess from the short diary entry. If you want to flesh it out in the RP, that's fine, though I will need a brief description at least.
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On the first point, he can't actually do this yet, and even just opening an electronic door is going to take a [i]lot[/i] of work. There are a huge number of circuits in anything even mildly electronic. To get to the point where he can just reach into the Internet will take far longer. I intended that bit to show that he tends to think big.

Secondly, he's not anywhere near master-level. He's skilled, yes, but not anywhere near as good as original-Merlin, or as powerful. He can throw fireballs, make short walls of ice, cause some little earth tremors, stuff like that, but nothing really big or dangerous.

Thirdly, Arthur's strength is again something I didn't make clear enough. I didn't mean throw as in 'toss a tree like a baseball and watch it sail away into the sunset', I meant throw as in 'shunt it ten meters into the other trees so it's out of the way'. That's one-handed, and at max force he could probably have thrown it maybe twenty meters, so with two hands he could probably throw a tree maybe forty, fifty meters, just within your maximum range. Coincidentally, this also allows me to calculate his weight limit - given that a good-sized oak tree can weigh in at 30-50 tons or more, we can say that he can lift and throw up to a hundred tons, two handed, and just lift maybe up to two hundred. For purposes of comparison, that's just about enough to singlehandedly get a blue whale off the beach and back into the sea, which seems fairly reasonable considering the levels of superstrength we see elsewhere (Superman towing the whole [i]planet[/i], for example.)

As for fleshing it out, the issues raised above have made it obvious that I need to be clearer.

[hider=A Better CS][b]Merlin[/b]
[i]Project Lazarus[/i]

Age: 19
Height: 5' 5"
Gender: Male

Description: Short, with black hair and eyes that constantly change colours. Fairly pale skin, and slender.
Personality: Fairly quiet, but not shy, simply soft-voiced. Has a dry sense of humour. Is an avid lover of knowledge.

Skills:
[i]Genius[/i] Merlin is one of the smartest people ever to live. His mind can draw conclusions in seconds that would take other people hours of work. Complex mathematics are little more to him than a child's toy.
[i]Mental Discipline[/i] Merlin's mind is organised into a landscape within which are stored his memories, thoughts, feelings and everything else about him. It also includes some vicious defenses, so any telepaths will get a nasty surprise.

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[b]Arthur[/b]
[i]Project Lazarus[/i]

Age: 19
Height: 6' 8"
Gender: Male

Description: Tall and muscular, with blonde hair and blue eyes. Tanned skin, white teeth and very good-looking.
Personality: Loud, boisterous and brash. Think early Thor ("I like it! Another!" *smash*)

Skills:
[i]Martial Artist[/i] Arthur is a black belt in multiple martial arts, and has even begun work on his own style. He fights like was born to it, and is especially good with a sword.
[i]Smith[/i] While not intellectual, Arthur instinctively knows how to get the exact best out of any material in the forge, and how to make some truly incredible alloys. He has a sword, personally made from a combination of all manner of esoteric elements, that can stand up to bullets and more.

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[b]From the Diary of Merlin[/b]

[i]We've always been different, me and my brother. I love him dearly, of course, but he and everyone else just seem so... slow. I look at things, and I[/i] know. [i]It's just intuitive. Build on what you have, make connections with what you know... the way everyone else has to have things explained to them time and time again is excruciating.

My closeness to my brother isn't something you'd expect. We're complete opposites. I'm short, thin and dark-haired with eyes that are constantly changing colour, while he is tall and muscular with blonde hair and piercing blue irises. I love knowledge, while my brother devotes himself to physical pursuits - martial arts and sports. Then again, that's probably to do with our powers. You see, neither of us are normal. My powers are ethereal, almost magical. I call the overall ability Kinesis, though I have many different subsets: pyro-, hydro-, geo-, aero-, and cryokinesis. I'm pretty good with all of them, and although my scope is limited to a couple of meters for any one effect, my range is pretty much as far as I can make out what I'm aiming for, and my control is good enough to exclude my brother from the area-of-effect stuff. Recently, however I've discovered electrokinesis. Since that one developed, I've been devoting my training to it almost exclusively. I want to get enough fine control to interface with modern electronics. I've also been trying to bring out magnetokinesis - if I can do so, and combine it with electrokinesis, I'll be able to tap into any transmission, anywhere. It's a thought both incredible and scary. Uncle Ben said it best - with great power, comes great responsibility.

My brother, as I've already said, is completely unlike me. He's definitely not the brightest bulb on the Christmas tree, but he does his best. Where he really excels is in the physical. While I can manipulate my environment, his personal capabilities are beyond belief. I once saw him lift an entire tree that had fallen across the road and throw it ten meters or so back into the forest like it was nothing. One day, a guy came and tried to rob the house. He blasted my brother point-blank with a shotgun. It ruined his shirt and gave him bruises all across his chest for all of two days. In retaliation, my brother flicked him - [/i]flicked[i] him - through the wall and all the way down the road.

We had to move on again after that. Recently, though, we've found some answers. Why we are the way we are. Where we came from. And it turns out we may have been more accurate with our nicknames than we thought. Maybe we really are...

Merlin and Arthur.[/i][/hider]