[quote=Joegreenbeen]
Yes. But, it doesn't have to be Vahir, though it would be preferable since he is the GM, I was just asking if someone would look over it.
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Your NS is a bit block of texty, but I see no problems with the content itself. As for the content, it's your nation, after all, so I'm not really well placed to tell you "No, your government should be X, your capital should be called Y". When it comes to things like this, no comment is a good comment. (Or at least that's my philosophy)