@Reap: I'm about to go to bed, but right off the bat and I can tell you two things: 

Firstly, you need to reread the requirements for the personality section. 4-7 words tops-- narrow that description down to 4-7 adjectives. You'll get a chance to better reveal his personality in the IC

Secondly, number his skills.

I'll read over the rest of it tomorrow. Until then... Goodnight.