[quote=ShadowRaeper] Name:Maya Tersan Gender:FemaleAge:21 Appearance: Maya her blue hair is quite long, it is something she is proud of, she has a normal body build and her lenght is average like any other girl.She always tries to wear as les clothes as possible so that she can move more freely in them, as her clothes also give enough room for her to move quite fast if she has to. Magic(If applicable):Telekinese Tier 1: Maya is able to move an object within 5 meters away. Tier 2: Maya is able to move an object within 15 meters away. Tier 3: Maya is able to move two objects at the same time. Tier 4: Maya is able to move objects within 35 meters away. Tier 5: Maya is able to move objects within 45 meters away. Tier 6: Maya is able to move three objects at the same time. Tier 7: Maya is able to move objects within 55 meters away. Tier 8: Maya is able to move objects within 65 meters away. Tier 9: Maya is able to move four objects at the same time. Tier 10: Maya is able to move objects within 75 meters away.Etc Etc.... Personality:Maya is a girl who is quite sweet and nice, or thats just how she seems to be on the outside.Maya actually is one who wants to purge the world of evil, thinking of any possible way to do so, aldo justice is done by the police as most people say, Maya thinks that justice can come in different ways.There for she holds her secret hidden away, for her darkness that dwelms within her will come out eventually once the time is right.Maya also sometimes feels lost, aldo she barelly makes it seeable, for she feels like her life is meaningless and doesn't has a purpose for anyone. Background:Maya comes from a family who barelly came around, aldo she didn't care much for money. Aslong as they had a roof above their heads and food to feed them, she was fine with it. She didn't had any siblings, for the one who would have been her sibling died with birth.Her father works as a plumber, aldo its not the best job, it feeded them and gave them their house. Her mother worked in a shop for clothes, it was something she did few times a week, just so that they had some extra money.Once Maya got out of the house, she started to find her own place and started to work in the library, books always fascinated her for so she found it suitable to work with them.After she got accepted with her work, she found a small house just outside of the rich district, where she started to life her small but certain life.Day in day out she goes to the library, read the books as she looks at the customers coming in to give their rented books back or take books with them. Theme: [/quote] ShadowRaeper...I can't accept this. If this was a casual OOC you could probably get away with a sheet like this, but this is just bad. Many words are misspelled, her personality and background are way too vague, and you don't even include all of the bullets I wanted you to in my Character Template. Other things I would like you to address are your powers, while fine by itself the tiers are a little TOO specific than I'd like. How do you judge what's 75 feet away and what's 25 feet away in text. I would like to see more of how powerful her magic is, not necessarily how far away she can lift things. Rather than give a specific number, simply allude to the fact that her range has increased. Another issue you need to address is how powerful this magic is, multiple objects are good but what of the weight of the object, the duration of the lift, etc, etc. I also don't really understand the less clothes comment, does she wear armor or is the difference between clothing that covers her body THAT much related to her speed? I would address the spelling errors, reevaluate her magic, be a bit more specific with her personality(You vaguely hint at a darkness inside her, but to me that feels too much like "Main Character Syndrome"), and MUCH more specific with her background. In a city that assigns roles, how did she become a librarian, her reaction to magic, etc. etc. [quote=Mizuho] Yay! The OOC is up :DSo, I have a question. For magic, how far are we allowed to branch out? In the example, it seems to be something like here's one ability, and it begins to get stronger with each tier. But are we allowed to have a general overarching power, with little sub-abilities for each tier? For example, if there was a power to control all elements (Pretty OP and broad I know, but this was the first example I could think of. I'm not necessarily considering this) could the first tier be to control fire, then the next tier be controlling water?The magic I'm considering has to do with voice. For the first tier, could I have something to do with a persuasive voice, and the next tier could be something to do with more of a combative side like a deafening screech? Or do they all have to be somewhere along the lines of "Tier 1: ability to scream loudly. Tier 2: ability to scream loud enough to damage ear drums" etc?I'm sorry if I'm not making any sense x_x and I realize this is kinda repetitive. [/quote] Ohoh seems like our scholar friend (Alright me) has a little more research to do. That is actually really cool, I didn't think of combining magical abilities. In fact I think I could make that work, but under certain circumstances. A person who controls all elements for example would be less proficient with them say if they just specialized in water, however they would be more suitable to wider variety of circumstances. If that's the case then the tier system would still apply, however the users powers would increase at a slower amount to others(Having to adapt a bit more to the current situation rather than rely solely on their power). In your situation I don't think anything would have to be changed, and in fact I rather like the sort of "Push" aspect you're going with the voice magic. That would work, you could focus on differing levels of persuasion as well as well combative magic as it falls under the same category as "Voice", aside from water vs. fire magic which generally have differing styles of attack. Since you have a sort of persuasion power, that would be a good tier 1 ability, however very limited in amounts, You could for instance make the person your talking to feel a certain way(I hate to make this example, but a Jasper from Twilight sort of power) but you couldn't directly influence their decisions. Then for instance your tier 2 power could be that scream attack, however perhaps focus more on disorientation rather than shattering the ear drum. Because you are somewhat limited with your abilities, your persuasion and scream attacks would level sides by side. Say for instance your tier 3 power would be the ability to influence weak willed individuals, while your tier 4 power could potentially shatter eardums. In fact why stop there? Experiment a bit on how you view a good tier leveling system for your powers to be, however eventually I have the image of you shooting rays of death from your mouth or even using your voice to project yourself into the air. ...Anyway I'm being a bit hard to understand as well. My point is I welcome creative freedom, and part of the fun of this RP is the ability to design your own forms of magic. Balancing it compared to others might be a bit difficult, however I'm looking forward to see character designs and where this RP could go. Don't think you'll have access to say you tier 5 powers immediately, however the leveling system is a way to spice up the combat just a bit when it comes down to it. Anyway I appreciate the question, let me know if I answered it well enough or if you have any more concerns.