[quote=AbigailTenshi]
Okay and well, Gio was an example, I mean your side plot would open up a background for your character, gives them a little more life and something to relate to others with. For instance, my characters Fumio an Souta can relate to Zane's characters Aya and Chie due to similar things happening in all of their pasts which is family issues. But that was just a suggestion, I don't think you should build your character on the basis of someone else's. From what I see of your character, they're eager to become the Captain of Squad two, maybe only because you like the Squad in general. But, what I'd suggest is that you build upon your characters want, like why does he want to become a Captain so bad? Why Squad two in particular? Does he idolise the Squad two Captain? Or is his family trying to force him into a higher rank due to their high expectations of him? Or does he feel that become a Captain will help him achieve something other than just a high rank? Maybe someone's looking for him? Maybe he made a deal with someone from an outside organisation that ended up in them taking his family hostage or as slaves and he feels that he needs the power of a Squad two Captain to rescue them? Seriously, the possibilities are endless and having a side plot is fun to play out. Not just for you, but for other people reading or other characters witnessing it play out ^_^
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Love it all thank you, I'm going to steal one of those and see how everyone reacts to it