[quote=Cpt Toellner]
Well, the writing seems a little cramped, like you were rushed writing this. But I look forward to reading.
[/quote]

I'm not really good at writing.

It gets worse when I'm roleplaying, knowing that people are going to respond with more stuff to describe and more stuff to turn into a post.

But writing on my own is better, especially because I'm doing it with my own characters and I know what to expect. Building up from that takes time to get used to for me but once I do I can make a pretty solid story.