[quote=Azaria Blue]
Hello there, Plightz! First, I'm going to comb over the character a little, but even so, I don't know if I'll take another. We shall see. Please don't take offense to this, I'm just trying to help!First of all, the background is a bit shotty, as you mentioned. I found it a bit hard to follow, although it could work well with some work. Feel free to edit your post, perhaps consider a more linear line and checking to make sure it all fits together.Secondly, what kind of battle training? Karate, front-line style? This adoptive, battle-master father adopted a teenager? It seems to be a bit clunky.As for gear, it looks good around there. Also personality works as well ^_^
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Don't worry, I can take constructive criticism, as long as its constructive and can help me! Which this is, i am gonna quick review my character. Thanks
Yes, front line style is what i had in mind, Sorry bout it being a bit clunky, still trying to get used to writing character sheets lol