Thanks for your advice o3o Hip hop huh?
... Now that I think about it I'm probably stuck on one of my characters then -3-' he's cursed to only speak in raps. 

On the other hand though, I'm not the biggest fan of traditional poetry. This was more to be... kind of a slam poem. I'm sure you know about slam poetry; and if I could read this out loud for you I would. Thanks for bringing up those points though. Do you have any poems you'd like to share of your own original design?