Acknowledged, i usually prefer dialogue over descriptions, so that's the reason i'm still bad at it.

[quote=Rin]
...That was intentional, wasn't it? >.>
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Now, now, he was just stating the truth. I know full well that i suck, so that's why i'm accepting the criticism that i don't usually get. (or rather, never get, just check [url=https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLskWWnMRAQtlPGC2OpYxmWJPKhOFc_keo]this[/url] to see if there's any comment on my writing style.) The only other time i was called out on my writing style was [url=http://charmer-yugioh.vampire-legend.net/t833-the-fael-fanction-boundaries-of-elements]here[/url]
^This is not to be taken as an excuse from me, just stating that i don't get feedback at all, and i'm quite happy that people are rigorous here.