MrFoxNews:

Helix looks pretty good, though there are a few things to consider. The gunship model commonly seen in the games (not sure if this is what you intend to use as its not the only gunship that exists) is renowned for being capable of pretty much everything [i]except[/i] FTL. So some clarification on the gunship model might be nice.

Not sure about the Aria thing, a lot of people have met her in passing over the years, though not that many actually know her. I'm happy to leave it as long as you know that you cannot NPC Aria, if you wish her to show you must ask me to play her, though I will most likely keep her totally out of this game even if Finch does want to chat with her...

Possibly the most major issue, a fairly commonly made mistake, is that humans have been in the galaxy for less time than your characters age, which means he cant've been born on Bekenstein. At 46, he'd have to be earth-born I believe. Dervish is better with the human timeline than I am, he can give you specifics. (I'm more of an Asari/Salarian/Quarian person, though I have working knowledge of all the races.)

The only other thing is that your Turian has a very human name.