[quote=Rock Killjoy]
So I hope I didn't ramble or overstep in the rp or anything. If I did or anyone sees anything I need to work on please let me know, this is my first advanced forum rp so I'm trying to not mess it up.
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I'm glad you're admitting that.

I can only see a few things wrong with the post. For one, the place the Jarl calls his home in Falkreath isn't a palace and calling it such would probably be met with laughter. The Jarl lives in a longhouse, which is pretty much what it sounds like. If you have Skyrim, feel free to hop onto it and check out Falkreath's layout. If not, you can just hop onto a wiki and search it up. A google image search of "Falkreath jarl's longhouse" might turn up a good picture.

Also, the people of Falkreath, especially the captain, would've treated you more harshly if they saw you were wearing the trappings of a Reach(wo)man. If you could edit your post with just a quick snippet about Finnen shoving a traveling cloak to cover yourself and a bedroll to wrap your sword in, that would certainly help Alana blend in well. I wouldn't expect the people of Skyrim to take too kindly to the sight of a Forsworn woman with a big sword.