[quote=Crya]
@Rock Killjoy: Overall you're doing fine, that is pretty much the extent of the control you can have over an NPC. Not fully what I would have had the captain say, seeing that if you knew everything about the Alessian Empire and its actions from the OP this roleplay would be no fun. But it's ok. If you want some advice I'd say to have separate paragraphs between speakers, and some grammar/spelling errors to work on.I understand that this point in the roleplay you can't do much by yourselves (think of this as the intro/prologue to the story, things will change). If anyone wants to collaborate on a back and forth between the Jarl or what they find when they go looking for evidence, let me know. I think we can find out a lot more about the Alessian Empire and advance the story faster that way.
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Yeah as for grammar I do apologize, English grammar rules have always eluded me.

[quote=Leidenschaft]
I'm glad you're admitting that.I can only see a few things wrong with the post. For one, the place the Jarl calls his home in Falkreath isn't a palace and calling it such would probably be met with laughter. The Jarl lives in a longhouse, which is pretty much what it sounds like. If you have Skyrim, feel free to hop onto it and check out Falkreath's layout. If not, you can just hop onto a wiki and search it up. A google image search of "Falkreath jarl's longhouse" might turn up a good picture.Also, the people of Falkreath, especially the captain, would've treated you more harshly if they saw you were wearing the trappings of a Reach(wo)man. If you could edit your post with just a quick snippet about Finnen shoving a traveling cloak to cover yourself and a bedroll to wrap your sword in, that would certainly help Alana blend in well. I wouldn't expect the people of Skyrim to take too kindly to the sight of a Forsworn woman with a big sword.
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I hadn't even thought about the fact it wasn't a palace I was typing late last night and it slipped my mind entirely, the scale of falkreath that is. As for the captain I realized basically right after I posted but I was too tired to change it e.e 

Sorry and thank you both, for pointing these things out.