Alright so, a few things. 

Hir/zie? Assume you're going for a non-gendered he/his thing but... it sounds awkward and jarring. If you dont want to assign gender at all you could use something like its or their which sounds a little less awkward. 

Shes mentioned this before, but no one really knows what fractured are yet. Not even fractured themselves. Sentient ones would have something like a feeling of being fundamentally damaged or incomplete but not exactly know why. 

Final thing to bring up... Don't want to be rude or anything but... image quality. Its, well, very rough. Shes a very visual person so that kind of thing is pretty grating to her. She could try and give some places to find images if you want

Soo anywho, aside from those nitpicks it looks fine to her. If those could be fixed it'd be all good

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Also Dblade, you should edit your post on the CS thread to ahve your characters appearance.