[quote=Leonerdo]
No. Read it yourself or just don't bother yourself with the conversation.
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Whateves, if you don't wan an ally, so be it. I'd recommend you two read On Writing by Stephen King, or any book that authors write about being an author. A minimalist approach is usually better than adding unnecessary fluff. You only really need to add fluff if you need to make your product a bit longer or to fill up space, otherwise its best to let the person imagine what things look like. Just don't skip on scenery painting, thats usually very important, though colors can usually be omitted if they're the norm.

If your making points, make them like Mr. D, nice and bullet pointed with separate paragraphs. Makes it much easier to read. in fact I'm going to take my own advice with posts. shorter paragraphs!