I was polite to Arch until he didn't read my post, attempted to reply to it regardless, and then proceeded to give my friend and I unsolicited writing advice. That's not helpful or trying to find a solution, it's just belittling. It's the same as going to a basketball game, watching none of it, finding out what the score was at the end, and trying to tell the players how they could improve. His advice wasn't even pertinent, as he was quoting Stephen King's "On Writing", a book that talks about writing fiction (and, yeah, cutting out needless stuff is a very useful thing to keep in mind when writing, but there's a difference between length and needless fluff; Archmage incorrectly said King advocates minimalism in his writing and keeping things as short as possible, which is not true) when we're dealing with nonfiction/rhetoric, which is entirely different. And, not to sound condescending here, we're thoroughly dissecting the problems we see in this RP. If it's more than you feel like reading, don't read it. We put this in the OOC and not PM's because we felt they were issues that threatened the overall RP, and if you're not concerned with that, keep on scrolling. I feel like trying to summarize it into one sentence is pointless, and being told that we should is dismissive of the effort we've put into analyzing what we perceive as wrong. Likewise, saying it's all an angry rant writes off any legitimacy I had without actually responding to it. Regardless, I have issued "one sentence" criticisms previously in the OOC and they've been ignored. I feel my posts get to the point perfectly; there are many points, and I elaborate on them. I'm not rambling or attempting to misdirect you with their size, they're merely my full thoughts on the matter. My posts aren't big to try and confuse anyone; they're big because I have a lot to say. Well, had.

And I don't mean to be petty or semantic, but telling us that we fail at language while saying "if people can't understand what your saying" is somewhat ironic. Telling us that it's our failing after you thoroughly read the entire thing and responded isn't anything on us, that seems to be more of a problem on your end. If you were confused by anything in there, you should've mentioned it with your initial response and not halfway through the argument that followed.

Regardless, this is going nowhere. Out, for good.