Looks good to me. You play monster hunter? Your weapon reminds me of the Charge Axe. Once it gets localized for the USA and I get myself the correct device, I plan to use one myself. As for the writing itself, I like it well enough. Lots of detailed but spaced well to make it seem less cluttered. But I don't think you asked me because you were fishing for compliments, are you? Well, my only gripe are a few word choices that are grammatically incorrect and make it awkward to read out loud as well that you have a lot of fragmented sentences, but I wouldn't fault you for that. The intent got through well enough, it just needed proofreading.

Also, do you need a partner? Cause I do.