[quote=Lucius Cypher]
Looks good to me. You play monster hunter? Your weapon reminds me of the Charge Axe. Once it gets localized for the USA and I get myself the correct device, I plan to use one myself. As for the writing itself, I like it well enough. Lots of detailed but spaced well to make it seem less cluttered. But I don't think you asked me because you were fishing for compliments, are you? Well, my only gripe are a few word choices that are grammatically incorrect and make it awkward to read out loud as well that you have a lot of fragmented sentences, but I wouldn't fault you for that. The intent got through well enough, it just needed proofreading.
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I appreciate the constructive criticism and no, I wasn't fishing for compliments. They make me feel uncomfortable. I realize I I reuse/repeat quite a few words and I'm working on my grammar and my fragmented sentences though I'm not sure how I should go about correcting them. I try to be a stickler and keep myself to a high standard of literacy. I use too many commas along with the word 'and'. Not sure how to cut down on that. Any advice on how I could remedy this?

Also - [IMG]http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-9SCgXJ5h9PY/TZ3684uVWGI/AAAAAAAAAG8/c0e3Uyc9fuA/s1600/confused2.jpg[/IMG] It seems I've been discovered. Yes, I have played the Monster Hunter games for years and absolutely love them. Kuhaku's weapon is directly inspired [s](*cough cough* RIPPED OFF *cough*)[/s] from the Charge Blade/Axe from Monster Hunter 4 Ultimate.