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Also, yes, I do need a partner, but I think Kuhaku will have issues with Gren. For one, didn't you previously mention something about 'cannibalism' in past posts? That wouldn't sit well with him. Secondly, I believe Sauron's future CS is lined up to be my partner but it seems he won't be able to join for some time due to IRL issues/business. But, we can form a team in the future so if you're fine with Tiger-Boy, I'd be down for a partnership.
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That cannibalism bit was just my form of OOC humor. Nothing I say in the OOC guarantees what happens or what is true with my character in the IC. Anyways, I'm just waiting for a good chance to get Gren involved, because as it stands I'm waiting for either Alice to respond as Serara towards Priscilla, or for Lowkey's Yael to do a collab with me. And in the event that neither occurs, I'm making sure I'm keeping all options open. I have no issues with personal partners or team make up. I make shit work, one way or another.

As for helping you fix your writing, I can't say that I'm the best person for it. I too put in lots of commas when I write often for no discernible reason. I write the same way I speak, which is to say not always correctly and with lots of pauses, thus commas or ellipses.