No no, the pointers method worked nicely. I'm talking about your post.

When you got to the scene where the crazy mechanic and eli converse, you kind of just generally skipped it. I was saying, in my opinion, it makes for a better post if you add it in to your post, since you know what Eli is going to say to her.

[quote=Aeonumbra]
”You,” He said, pointing at a the literal definition of a samurai, at least she looked like one. Hell she was even Japanese to boot, ”Why exactly are you here samurai? I doubt it's honor.” Eli said, blatantly throwing that jab at her. She seemed to take it stoically, unflinching.

”"The reward, mainly. Good materials are hard to come by, so getting a cut of 18.000 credits that I can use? No way in hell I'm gonna say no to that." She glanced away, just for a moment as she spoke. It was a curious tell, something you looked for in liars, but Eli was no interrogator, despite the charade he was putting up.
"What makes me think you won't become dead weight" He asked, staring at her intently.

"Mention one guy here who can repair a weapon on the field should it get damaged. Right, I thought so. Plus, a sniper is never deadweight, nor is someone who can kill without a sound." She said haughtily, apparently quite confident in her abilities. He also liked that, confidence. He moved on.[/quote]

A conversation has two perspectives, and this only shows the conversation from Eli's side. We have no idea what your character's thoughts and emotions are. Just mine.

By adding the conversation again in your post, we'd then see if from your character's perspective, which helps us build a better understanding of your character, while furthering character development.

It's more of an "in my opinion" thing, you don't -have- to, but I feel it makes a better experience. You don't have to edit this post, I just wanted to give you a pointer/tip/suggestion/etc.