While you raise some good points, especially about the over the top despair I intentionally worked into the CS, I fail to see how his particular fighting style is any more or less imaginative than say, punching things. What you tend to get in PMMM RPs is a pissing match in terms of magic, with each CS having a more interesting and 'original' method than the last; I prefer to ignore that and have a character focused on personality (admittedly, a rather bleak personality).

Your points about him being homeless and not having all the advantages of a normal child, more or less correct. But read it again and I never stated whether or not he [i]had[/i] been at an orphanage, or attended school. He simply doesn't know anymore and after a couple years living on the streets drunk and drugged out his eyeballs, how could he know? A big part of his personality is that he is right on the brink of falling into complete despair, which is intended as a plot hook for others to interact with, instead of having a character who is flawless and happy, needing no help.

And last but not least, I call complete bullshit on him being in any way a Sue. He is [i]broken,[/i] not perfect; his combat style is self-destructive, his lifestyle is slowly staving him to death, he is socially awkward. And being distrustful is one HELL of a weakness. I take your point about his combat style and I can change that if necessary; the intention was actually to make him [i]weaker,[/i] as he would need to rely on others to fight stronger Wraiths; again, a plot hook.

I can see where your coming from, but I still disagree. Plus I did say that I can remove the BIO and Personality sections if required.