[quote=Monster]
Hey there DragonBeastMode, your character idea was very original and different, fun to read. However, there were a few instances where your character seemed a little OP: otherwise, Ms. Mathews was done. See what I did there? Sorry, I'm horrible, I know. Bonjour Charlie, I like the way you put the biotic a into play. There is one thing that you will need to adjust in order to be accepted. You will find it below. 
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Ok I'll take that out, what if I just fixed and say that the person as to be willing to be controlled, would that be better or still to op, and what if Instead of leader role, she would be more of co leader, not wanting to have to much responsibility, but not wanting to be the back up plan or something like that, if that makes since.