Really good post and a fun read! Barb's rather barbed personality is amusing as hell, so points for that. :D

A couple minor things that do need to be edited though are regarding the Tyrus. The turians had retired the ship, but due to clerical errors it wasn't classified as a the stealth prototype it was and that wasn't properly dismantled, and secondly very few people know their ship is a stealth prototype so that wouldn't be hugely common knowledge, and the turian government wouldn't be after it, especially since they have already contacted Nova about potential work.

However, the nature of this post can still work! It's very possible the Suns know all about what Nova's flying and could be the ones footing the bill for the job, so I'd focus it more on that. Other than that, I like it!