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I put up a big of a longer post this time around, and to the more experienced writers here I like to ask for some advice.I feel as if I got setting the scene down quite solidly but to me my characters lack much depth, or emotion. They seem very in-personnel and a bit cold, im wondering if you guys had any suggestions on writing them?
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Grammar could use some work. There are some awkward sentences.