@ Everyone, The timeline has been cleaned up. If you feel i'm missing some vital information, or would like to include something from your characters history, say so. You can find it either a few posts up, or by the link I posted in the Accepted Characters section.

@Raven, your character bio looks good, however do you have any idea how your character could get herself involved in the current conflicts? I would rather players know how their characters will be involved in the political mechanics of the world.

@Tali, I'm not so sure about your second character. Coming from a foreign land is fine, but the trouble I'm having is that your character is the captain of a ship, a pirate ship no less. All of the players here on on fairly equal ground, while some may have more political sway then others, but being the captain of an entire ship is kind of a big thing. Not to mention i'm not sure how comfortable I am with how your character became captain. She flung some people overboard, caught another ship on fire and then this crew of killers and thieves followed her for some time (long enough to get a reputation) without question? Plus going from the slave girl to the captain is a big jump, and why did your character not use her magic to stop herself from being abused if she was strong enough to catch a ship on fire? 

 I'm fine with the foreign character concept, but I think this one has a little too many plotholes. Plus I feel your not utilizing the fact that your character is foreign. Having a foreign character in the RP for the simple sake of having her be foreign isn't really what I'm looking for. I want you to make a story around it. Maybe your character was taken as a slave and sailed across the ocean. When the ship was a breath away from land a storm struck and nearly everyone died, except your character who found herself on land in a strange world she knew nothing of. With your current character simply pirating off the coast of Gorgon, I don't feel there is any need for to hail from a foreign land.

@ Gowi, 

There is a pretty big age differential between you and Lucian, who are siblings. I would recommend somewhere in your Bio you mention that your father remarried a younger woman, which would make the age gap more plausible. Also, you need to change around the years a little. The earliest you can be born is 18 years ago, meaning you were conceived the prior year, but born when your father went to war. Since the coup began two years after your father left, and ended with his death the third year, I would recommend you say your character left Gorgon around age 2 or 3, since you currently say she left at age 6 (meaning they lingered for a few years after Briar took the throne)

@Headphones, I could probably put those to use.