[Quote=Rtron]Your CS[/quote]

Dervs and I, over a discussion about your character found a few things still to be desired.

My first concern- Does the character [i]have[/i] to be a Naga to work? This will be the central concern from which all others spring.

For one, Dervish and I found your personality a bit mixed up. This man is a killer going through an everlasting existential crisis that has turned him basically into what Rustin Cohle would call a metapsychotic. In your quest to make a Nietzschean ubermensch-minded, Beyond Good and Evil, Boethiah inspired independent assassin, you kind of got lost along the way and made Riddick the Freudian-Metapsychotic Naga Argonian. Sorry. Try researching what Boethiah is all about.

I would suggest looking at [url=http://www.reddit.com/r/teslore/comments/2a2blz/rambling_on_nietzsche_boethiah_and_a_dash_of_vivec/]this[/url] for the Boethian angle you're going for or what I assumed you were going for.

To elaborate on the personality, he's a psychotic who has a modus operandi akin to a serial killer but he's kind and laid back. That's what we got from it. I can understand how being in the equivalent of a sensory deprivation chamber for a few months without breaks could fuck with someone's head, but they would be anything but nice and laid back. They'd be what you see on street corners today, wrapped in ragged clothing and sleeping under newspapers. Anything that makes you question reality that hard seriously fucks with you. I've seen it firsthand from someone who only spent hours in a similar situation to Zaskar and it ain't pretty. Two years ago and he still gets after-shocks from time to time. That's a story for a different time though.

That being said, if you change the personality, you'll have to change a good part of the backstory. That's the way things are. As it stands, Dervish brought up that he feels a lot of what happened to your character was made just to justify having those RIddick-like abilities.

We also caught something else, which was that he's an 8 foot tall lizard-man who specializes in stealth. I advise you change that. 8 foot tall things are rarely, if ever, stealthy.

And then, well, there's this. Dervs and I found this odd, and I kind of got disappointed knowing that this particular section came from someone who was involved, albeit for a very short time, with the first RP in this series to show such lack of research. Here it is.

[quote=Rtron] It was pure bad luck that found him in [b]*insert name of Hammerfell city we’re in*[/b] when the Dwemer conquered it.[/quote]

Look at the last few pages or posts. You don't even have to read it, just skim. It's easy, man. It starts with an H.

Also, some useful things to read when reading over my psycho-babble.

The medical definition of psychosis: "a symptom or feature of mental illness typically characterized by radical changes in personality, impaired functioning, and [b]a distorted or nonexistent sense of objective reality.[/b]"

Your character sounds like he's psychotic. Of course, that much was obvious already. I don't have to tell you this. But people with psychosis, as with many other psychological disorders or things of the same vein, like PTSD, come in varying degrees. For your character to want to kill people to reaffirm his existence while maintaining a "HO HO, TOP OF THE MORNING, PEEPS" kind of attitude is just something not found. He wouldn't be happy in the sense that you and I are happy when we beat that one fucking boss or find out our high school crush is willing to swap spit in the bathroom at prom. No. Oh no, he'd be manic if he felt any sort of happiness at all.

Put yourself in Zaskar's shoes. Imagine being stuck in a hole and reduced to nothing but a vague awareness, something that existed in a vacuum. The only something that existed in a void of nothing for months. A few months stuck in that whole could be very well be a thousand years, because that's what it feels like when you're in that state. It's terrifying, and then it comes, that point where you just accept it, the event horizon where you shed any memory of your existence in the flesh-shell that was you, or Zaskar. Then imagine the jarring transition into something you came to believe was a faded illusion at most. Furthermore, you feel you need to kill to know you exist. Most liekly, this would not be his reasoning. His reasoning may very well be, "This is fake. All of it. So why not do it? Nothing is real."

He would be anything but "a fairly friendly and laid back individual." He'd be depressed and racked with doubt about everything at best, unable to trust anyone and the simplest slip-up with reality could send him into a panic attack. It's terrible and terrifying.

A list of effects of your character's experiences. You should take these into account and you'll know why the character concept when applied with realism like how Dervs and I like is along the same lines as lycanthropy and vampirism. Fantasy universe or no, criminally psychotic is criminally psychotic.

[url=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Depersonalization]Depersonalization[/url]: "Depersonalization (or depersonalisation) is an anomaly of self-awareness. It consists of a feeling of watching oneself act, while having no control over a situation.[1] Subjects feel they have changed, and the world has become vague, dreamlike, less real, or lacking in significance. It can be a disturbing experience, since many feel that, indeed, they are living in a "dream". Chronic depersonalization refers to depersonalization disorder, which is classified by the DSM-IV as a dissociative disorder."

[url=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emotional_detachment]Emotional Detachment[/url]: "Emotional detachment, in psychology, can mean two different things. In the first meaning, it refers to an "inability to connect" with others emotionally, as well as a means of dealing with anxiety by preventing certain situations that trigger it; it is often described as "emotional numbing" or dissociation, depersonalization or in its chronic form depersonalization disorder. In the second sense, it is a decision to avoid engaging emotional connections, rather than an inability or difficulty in doing so, typically for personal, social, or other reasons. In this sense it can allow people to maintain boundaries, psychic integrity and avoid undesired impact by or upon others, related to emotional demands."