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Don't care if I accepted this one before, as I recognize it kinda.

1) Master at 30, I can kinda live with. Though nowhere near the council level.
2) Remove this "Class" thing. Follow the format on the OP please.
3) Far too many abilities, not to mention two of them are rare abilities.
4) Samurai? What are they? Are they a type of food? Also too sentimental for a Jedi Master.
5) No Jedi Lovers in this time period. No-No Nope. Not son of two Jedi. Only Jedi allowed to produce offspring were off extinct races or races with peculiar reproductive systems. 
6) How doth one obtain such a deep connection to the Order? It wouldn't be a family link.
7) Jedi are required to find their own crystal for their lightsaber, it's part of the trials. Such has been canon for this era for a long time.
8) Well no to Mace Windu taking an interest. 
9) Initiate trials are simple, Jedi Code and understanding, crystal and lightsaber, basic combative test.
10) Dark Jedi who managed to beat Mace Windu and his Padawan wouldn't just be left alone.
11) Dark Jedi don't typically show mercy.
12) Eyes can be healed/replaced by either transplant or cybernetics
13) There'd be another trial to go through however right now I can't remember the different parts of the Trials of Knighthood. However I know that one of them is very self reflective that few people ever discuss.
14) So he's 32 at the end of his history but at the start of the sheet he's 30.

Those are my major points.

Just remember a) Master is a trial by honour not a first come first served and will only be chosen upon the start of the IC.
b) Follow the template posted on the OC
c) I do not let PCs have prolonged direct contact with canon characters.

If you meet someone in passing, or a secondary character such as the Librarian it's fine. Mace Windu is a bit more important than a secondary.

I personally recommend you try for the remaining Knight position, and if you want to keep going for master I won't consider it unless every point in my list is fixed, anything minor I trust you to sort yourself. I'm not opening this to discussion either, I've done that in the past and just got burned as a result.