[quote=Durnehviir]
Firstly, nice bio and I really do like the Jibun no Shindo. I particularly like how it is translated. . Sounds really cool. Empaths are typically fun to play too and I enjoyed the background and dynamic of the ability as a whole. It was well written and pretty nicely thought out. But! The only thing that I personally thought about it was that I felt that it had far too many different applications. It seems to me like it stretches into extremes. I feel like a few of the abilities didn't entirely fit the theme of an emphatically inclined ability. It felt like Mind's Eye of the Kagura with the ability to assimilate matter into ones body, manipulate the emotions of others, and psychometry all at once. I feel like empathy would be focused on a mental, neural, or emotional genetic ability, however a few of the applications seem like they'd honestly stem from more biological/physiological/elemental genetic abilities instead. Almost seems a little awkward at an attempt for versatility. I also feel like you didn't elaborate on just why this is a Kekkei Genkai enough. Like what are the physical, mental, and emotional adaptions that make the Akizakura so different from normal people? From what I read, I almost felt like you could simply things and make it a Hiden instead of an outright Kekkei Genkai. Maybe a little more buff and fluff to make Jibun no Shindo more of a Kekkei Genkai and not just a clan specialization technique. I also think the assimilation technique should be a fairly high level technique. That coupled with the mystical palm technique which is also exceptionally high for a Genin to freely use. Both of which without any mentioned formal training by anyone (at least in reference to the bio). I also think that a Medic Genin and a Swordsmen Genin and a Sensor/Scout Genin and a Chakra-control genius Genin are all very different emphasis for this character. They seem highly versatile for just a Genin fresh out of the academy. Nice character overall though. I enjoyed the bio. Though, the image is a little mature for a young 12 year old. haha.I would suggest not making any changes yet until Prince or Beta have a chance to look over the character as well.
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Thank you! This was very helpful, I'm grateful for the outside perspective, for this is a fresh character for this RP, not a rehashed idea of a previous character like I sometimes allow myself to do. ^_^ The versatility of the character was meant so that I could have her develop in a multitude of directions depending on where I wanted to take the character, it was not meant to be for the purpose of developing ALL of her strong points. The assimilation was an idea that I liked and wanted to fit into the character, so empathizing with the properties of an object seemed to be the way to go, giving her some combat application instead of a sensor who stood on the side and waited for someone to get injured :p But yes, I agree that it should be considered a high level technique, which is why I added limitations for a young user such as herself. The vast applications of assimilation without limits are too much for a mere Genin, obv. 

I agree about the picture, I could not find a young enough female that fit what I was looking for, so I chose a suitable picture for what I would like her to grow into, and hopefully others can use their imagination to see a younger lady in the appearance as I do. n.n

I will highly consider adding more background to the Kekkei Genkai and clan history, but I await further critique first!