[quote=Durnehviir]
Firstly, nice bio and I really do like the Jibun no Shindo. I particularly like how it is translated. . Sounds really cool. Empaths are typically fun to play too and I enjoyed the background and dynamic of the ability as a whole. It was well written and pretty nicely thought out. But! The only thing that I personally thought about it was that I felt that it had far too many different applications. It seems to me like it stretches into extremes. I feel like a few of the abilities didn't entirely fit the theme of an emphatically inclined ability. It felt like Mind's Eye of the Kagura with the ability to assimilate matter into ones body, manipulate the emotions of others, and psychometry all at once. I feel like empathy would be focused on a mental, neural, or emotional genetic ability, however a few of the applications seem like they'd honestly stem from more biological/physiological/elemental genetic abilities instead. Almost seems a little awkward at an attempt for versatility. I also feel like you didn't elaborate on just why this is a Kekkei Genkai enough. Like what are the physical, mental, and emotional adaptions that make the Akizakura so different from normal people? From what I read, I almost felt like you could simply things and make it a Hiden instead of an outright Kekkei Genkai. Maybe a little more buff and fluff to make Jibun no Shindo more of a Kekkei Genkai and not just a clan specialization technique. 

I also think the assimilation technique should be a fairly high level technique. That coupled with the mystical palm technique which is also exceptionally high for a Genin to freely use. Both of which without any mentioned formal training by anyone (at least in reference to the bio). 

I also think that a Medic Genin and a Swordsmen Genin and a Sensor/Scout Genin and a Chakra-control genius Genin are all very different emphasis for this character. They seem highly versatile for just a Genin fresh out of the academy. 

Nice character overall though. 
I enjoyed the bio. Though, the image is a little mature for a young 12 year old. haha.

I would suggest not making any changes yet until Prince or Beta have a chance to look over the character as well.
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Durn pretty much hits the nail on the head. She's well written and an enjoyable read, but seems to be trying to specialize in more areas than a Genin should. Perhaps were she a few years older and a Chunin, it might have been perfectly acceptable.

Chakra Scalpel and Mystical Palm technique are bot fairly advanced techniques that are usually only known by Skilled and Medically focused Chunin or Jounin. I'm perfectly fine with her starting to get the hang of one of them, perhaps even being able to use it to a degree outside of battle. But not both. Or, alternatively... she could know the CONCEPT of both of them, but still only be allowed to practice on dummies/dissections/etc.

I also like her empathetic abilities, but there will need to be an understanding that you won't go batshit crazy with them. Similarly with the weapon as well. But the character is well written enough that I feel I can let that go and trust you to use your better judgment.

Lastly... yeah, that picture is... unf. For the sake of not summoning pedobear, maybe find something that would be more age-appropriate for her? I mean... a 12 year-old with boobs bigger than my hands? IT'S A TRAP! RUN!!!!!

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If the requested edits/conditions are made/acceptable, then I will grant my approval.

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