[quote=Earnest Evans]
You seem to have a major issue with getting your tenses right.

"A rifle stock slams into the back of his head and he stumbles forward onto the vault door. He growls and brings a hand to the console at the side of the door" is in present tense, when it shouldn't be.

"A rifle stock slammed into the back of Finnand's head, sending him tumbling into the vault door. Growling, he brought his hand to the console at the side of the door." flows much better.
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yeah, i like to write in the present in most cases. I'm breaking the habit for my actual stories however (trying to)