[quote=@The Patriarch] Bolt was disappointed [b](1) that the hero had destroyed his precious kittens[/b] and he was annoyed. He then noticed that the hero was focused on the alien invaders and he rolled his [b](2) eyes, how[/b] hard was it to get someone's [b](3) attention, it[/b] was only aliens for Christ's sake! He decided that he would have to take down the aliens and attack the hero [b](4) as well get[/b] the arrogant asshole's full attention. He saw aliens attacking people on the ground and he flew at incredible speeds towards the invaders. Not caring about the [b](5) people he[/b] fired off a very powerful blast of electricity towards the alien creatures and it caused a powerful explosion which killed the aliens as well as several innocent people. Bolt then turned his sights on the ships and Press and flew towards them. He smiled when he came within thirty feet of the hero and the ships. "Hay asshat! Never turn your back on Bolt! Let's bring on the thunder!" he shouted and released an extremely powerful electric blast from his body [b](6) in the form of an explosion.[/b] It [b](7) blew away a few ships and caused them to fall from the sky and it was headed straight for Press and if it hit then the hero would sent flying and electrocuted badly.[/b] [/quote] I have bolded and numbered all the things wrong with your post, either grammatical, confusing, or just plain wrong. 1. Press did not destroy the kittens, the aliens did while trying to destroy Press. 2. There should be a period there instead of a comma. 3. Question mark should go there instead of a comma. 4. Minor thing, that should be "as well as". 5. Comma. 6. What's that supposed to mean? If what I interpret is true, then all Bolt did was create a single solitary explosion, with the initial blast appearing directly in front of him, rather than the huge wave of electricity I believe you were going for. 7. Multiple things here. First, I believe that the alien drop ships have forcefields and armor, so I doubt that even your lightning blast could have caused them to "fall from the sky" that easily. Most likely they'll be badly damaged at best, but probably not enough to destroy them outright. However, for the sake of argument, let's say it was possible to do what you had described. Having multiple ships destroyed in such a manner would most likely leave anyone our age pretty damn tired, trained by a shady organization or not. I mean, we are still adolescents. Also, that is one huge run-on sentence. There should not be so many "and's" there, and most should be replaced with commas.