Okay, now the last bit to fix up.

Now the backstory doesn't really suit your character's personality, or at least doesn't explain it. Considering that childhood, she should be a pretty sombre person. So add some spice to it.

There's also your name, Exoris. Please note the RP is set in Japan, so please choose a suitable name, or go the way Itano and other players did, make them originally from another country.

I'm sorry if it seems picky, but I do really prefer it when things abide by the laws of the world that has been set out.