Okay I've just walked thought the door so I'm half asleep while wait for my coffee machine to make me some tasty caffeine delivery system. Anyway I can somewhat see where you've edit. (like the pic of the school. I know which VN that comes from. Makes me wonder what you've been doing in you free time ;)) Off the top of my head I can't see anything I could suggest, however if we go over it I'm sure I could think of something...

Anyway PM when your ready or whatever I've got nothing to do so plan on wasting my day playing video games and watching anime. Its going to be a good day today.