[quote=@Roman] [@Nightrunner] and [@TheMusketMan], post a character sheet when you've actually got an idea. Empty skeletons (you guys didn't even try and come up with a freaking [i]name[/i], or fill out your notes - not even character-dependent) are not appreciated. They're ugly and space-wasting. It's well-written, it appeals to me because you cheated and used something that references Fallout, and it's a cool concept. However, it's also ridiculously overpowered, especially when we're explicitly looking for low-tier or under-developed meta's, and it's contradictory to in-universe 'laws' that have already been set out. A meta of Jackdaw's level would be turned over to Lex or Savage or any major leader immediately, not brought up within an independent merc outfit, and after 'going rogue', [i]definitely[/i] would not have lived through Deathtroopers to wake up in jail. You wouldn't have woken up. Recommendations are to reduce your powerset (better-than-average human, perfect shot, or skilled cqc combatant, not [i]all three[/i]) and to bring your character's history in line with the established in-universe laws. Frankly I find this character bizzare because [i]it's a sloth[/i] but you've endeared yourself to Wraith and a character being 'weird' is not a good enough reason to reject it, so for now this is doing well. I'll review it again when it's complete, however. This is another case of 'the new regime wouldn't take the chance'. Not only does he stick out because of his red skin, he's also a descendant of Trigon, a supremely powerful being, and one whose children have caused considerable trouble in the past (cough cough RAVEN). Again, we're looking for non-obvious and low-tier/undeveloped meta's and magi's. This is neither. Quoting takes hefty chunks from your character limit, so this adventure will continue in another post... [/quote] I edited the powers to your satisfactory, but can you explain your problems with the history? He was a baby when he was found, under rubble, so Lex or anyone else wouldn't have been notified of his existence. "A meta of Jackdaw's level would be turned over to Lex or Savage or any major leader immediately, not brought up within an independent merc outfit, and after 'going rogue', [i]definitely[/i] would not have lived through Deathtroopers to wake up in jail. You wouldn't have woken up." He never went rogue. He was a legitimate mercenary through and through; his father, Reggie - a significantly more skilled mercenary, had betrayed Savage by not going after the rebels, like Reggie had promised to do, and the Company was ambushed and taken out. Jackdaw was captured due to the combat enhancement he showed, and because he was the last of the Company; they wanted some sort of money out of this ordeal. Sorry if I'm not making sense, but do you understand? Or do I need to re-evaluate everything? [s]Also, I was looking for a cool name for the mercenary group, and then I glanced down at my copy of Fallout 3 and decided I liked Talon Company. Plus, it goes well with Jack's future alias.[/s]