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I'm sorry, it's fanfiction to me. I can tell you that it's coherent and has good elements to it, but not whether it's the greatest thing in the world, because I have no reference point.
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But I mean does it sound good? It doesn't need a reference point; it just has to sound good to the reader. A reader may have read no other sci-fi books by which to base their opinion of Ender's Game on, but if they enjoyed it, they enjoyed it. So, that said: Do you enjoy the way I wrote the montage segment? Does it give off a sense of grandeur? Completeness? Resolution?