@AiyvaGuard: Your bio is a bit hard to read as a wall of text so it took me a bit to actually look it over, if you could please break it up into paragraphs so it is easier for me and others who would like to read it to read. Now as for your magic mark. How I am taking it as it is passively active at all times and effects the area around her? If so how does she control it as the mark is not only the source but the control to the magic and it passively being active all the time would drain her more than empower her. Also how long would you have been in the Order as of now? fresh recruit or a member for some period of time. if the ladder I would like a little detail of the time spent within the order.

@knighthawk: So far looks good just one thing I can really see and that is you are missing something that was supposed to go into the CS (Hint read over the rules real quick)