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The grammar and spelling of the app needs to be fix, as well as the general organization of the paragraphs. The Cthulhu idea is also not serious and needs to be axed entirely.
[/quote]It might be played as a satire but such religions are actually quite plausible.
Far future civilizations may rediscover the Flying Spaghetti Monster and adopt it as their chief religion. Or well, look at the number of cults and new religions founded in the 20th century.
Just because it may look a complete sham it doesn't mean there couldn't be a large group of people practicing this religion.

On the other hand he should expand on or fix some details and indeed, grammar is something which is an obvious issue here.
Since English is my second language I can understand it well but I'm not sure what would a native speaker see in his app.
I have a feeling though that some of these language problems will be pretty much reoccurring during the RP.
So you probably need to weight this in with the decision.


EDIT: On a different note, can I post my NS on the characters page?
The essentials for judging my app are already there.
The background or history part is the only thing left and I'll add that whenever I get the time and inspiration I had yesterday.