[quote=@Seeker]
Well shit, I've just did a complete 180 on Telion's personality.
[/quote]

Well, the rampage isn't exactly his fault, so I don't think the personality's actually changed. He seems to be the same kid, with an unfortunate horror inside.

A constructive suggestion: Move the last paragraph lower, and add stars, underlines, or something else to indicate the passage of time. It's a bit confusing as is.



Edit: I've been fleshing out my opinions more. I'll try to get something on everyone.