[@Cyclone] Spelling and Grammar: 8/10 (the longer a post, the more likely for one to make typos and mistakes)
Writing Quality: 10/10
Story Line Advancement: 8/10 (very impressed by how powerful the Tribe has gotten, as well as Ialu. Some things seemed a tad difficult to imagine though. The sun burn after the fire was ok, but the amazing amount both Ialu and the dragon managed to do during the fall down the mountain, and the accuracy of it all, was a bit baffling. The cold seemed to be far less effective after a while as well, especially by the end where both Ialu and the warband seemed fine despite the weathers. Also, that's one blindly loyal warband xD. On the whole though, it was a long post and the postives were far greater than the negatives xP)
Character Development: 9/10 (Nice, he has discovered the Mighty One and become more open, kinda, to advice)
Independence: 10/10

15 Khookies
Also, how much time passed between that post and your previous one?