[@Cyclone] 
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 10/10
Story Line Advancement: 10/10 (very good, you've set yourself up nicely to go a-world conquering)
Character Development: 10/10 (he's really turning into quite the piece of work isn't he? And praising someone other than the true ender of the Eternal Winter and Darkness. Such ungrateful, puny mortals. Next he'll be claiming that this 'Mighty One' created Mankind too >.<)
Independence: 10/10

You get your 20 Khookies, damn it