Spelling and Grammar: 10/10 
Writing Quality: 10/10 (is it just me or was that post better than usual? And you ACTUALLY managed to get it in before 4 pm GMT+1 xDD)
Story Line Advancement: 10/10 (you just sunk half of Svei's islands. Poor Svei x(. You just watch, one day everyone will want to be his friend and he'll remember how horrid you and your hero were to him...)
Character Development: 10/10 (he developed from a normal man with a healthy love for water, into some kind of sea-minion of Undasis. What a development!)
Independence: 10/10 (great that there was interaction between Unda and Svei  before the whole sinking happened)

20 Khookies (what is with this full marks three time in a row?)