[quote=@Ellri]
!= is the boolean expression for "not equal".
"Jedi temple" isn't a faction. "Jedi Order" is.
Appearance is necessary to have.

Flaws could use a bit of expanding on how they affect him.

The "connections to Alat" bit is essentially a note that that bit in your bio has potential for being used for connections to other player characters.


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Greatly appreciated. I'll get right on the tweaking. Let me know if there is anything else you'd like to see with the character.

As far as the Cortosis goes I can expand on it because it makes sense for the character in my mind so I'll add in the extra but if in the end you don't like it i can remove it. So long as the character concept is fine i can adjust details until Ragnarok. Let me know if you think of anything else. I clean up and repost it