[@DisguisedDemon] There's a possibility your character could arrive at a later date. However, they will be 'an outsider' meaning that it could be fairly hard for them to enter into the group. As long as you understand that. Feel free to throw up a CS.

[@ShadowRaeper] I'll have another look at her. :)

Edit: There are still quite a few mistakes in there. ^-^;

Just a few pointers... 

Women is the plural form. Woman is the singular form. 

There are some instances where commas are good for the sentence. Most of the time commas are used to separate different clauses or ideas. When the idea is the same on both sides of the comma or the idea isn't complete, a comma isn't necessary. If you want to insinuate a pause use ellipses. Ellipses are just three dots and they usually signify a break or pause. 

"I'm uh... not sure we should even go there, Jack. Leave it alone."

When a word ends in the suffix '-ful,' it only needs one 'l.'

Wonderful
Bountiful
Beautiful
Useful

Appreciate is spelled like that... I'd recommend a spell check of some kind. If a word looks kind of funny or you don't know how to spell it or even if you don't really know the meaning, look it up. Google it. I do it fairly often when I use a word that I'm not sure how to spell or it's specific meaning. 

Insinuate means to 'to suggest or hint slyly'

The word through has two 'h's. 

Ye. Just have another look through it. :)