[quote=@Caits]
I think I've covered everything, but am happy for any help with niesha
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I'm being honest; I've been role playing with Vash for well over a year now and I know he won't accept your CS. He tends to be fairly strict when it comes to these things as we've all seen already.

I think the things that stand out to me the most are:

1) Her bio and parts of her appearance don't really fit in with the world. Remember this is mostly cyberpunk with elements of steam-punk. For some reason she comes across as more of a JRPG high fantasy character than a pirate on a distant planet. I'd probably place the blame largely on the design of the bow and her armor. 

2) You gave her a tragic backstory that explains how she got her skills and why she's left home, but you never actually mentioned her first run in with the Dusicyon or it's crew. You just say she joined them. From her tiny little island to joined. No in between.

3) This may be me nitpicking but I feel like her bio is also a little squishy. As in not solid. I feel a lot of contradiction when I read it and nothing is all that cohesive. Why is she so convinced that the house fire was deliberate? Why does it take her two years to track down the person who did it when all they are is a scared child? Was he still on the island or did he somehow find a way to jump from island to island evading her? Remember, if he is younger than her and she was eighteen at the time he is most definitely still a teen or child and people that age don't tend to have the same resources available to them as adults.

Just suggesting you tighten things up and find some way to better incorporate them into the world before you call it finished.