[quote=@Maxx][@cider] I'd suggest that you wait for the timeskip. It should be coming within the next 48 hours, so it won't be that long a wait. 
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Not a problem, I'll do that.

EDIT: If I may offer [@Blackmist16] a piece of advice; try reading the opening OOC posts thoroughly and a couple of the accepted sheets before writing your own, to help get a sense of what kind of what style and quality of writing the RP is looking for. As of now, aside from what others have mentioned, you have a large number of grammatical errors that really shouldn't be present in the Advanced section. Do you check your post in Word (or similar word processor)? If not, I'd recommend it. Sure helps me. Perhaps most importantly; make sure a character's personality isn't self-contradicting (or contradicting the history of said character), and rather a natural evolution of the character's experiences and surroundings (as well as throwing in some deeply rooted, highly personal traits). It's perhaps a more challenging process, but much more rewarding as well.